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Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/22/2016 23:40:59


Von Jewburg
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"I flitter about from post to post,
typing what triggers people most.
I live off anger, I thirst on rage,
and soon the forums enter a dark age"

Thus sayeth the Fissel, our Islamist,
In spamming forums he's a specialist.
Dexterous and strategic too,
he's able to outplay and outdebate you.

By the will of ALLAH, he gets his skill,
And a desert man who loved to kill,
He'll change up the rhythm of this tune,
I feel a change in mood coming up soon-


I am the very model of a modern little Islamist,
I defend sharia law and attempt to justify ISIS,
I know the caliphs and the sultans of which I'm related to,
And I'll chop your hands and head off if you think I disagree with you.
I'm very well acquainted with all sorts of things Quranical
I spend so much time praying that you'd think that it's hysterical
But from the Hadith I find that you are quite heretical
So I'll tell of your ALLAH'S punishment for you, it's truly terrible
He'll tell you of your punishment, it's very very terrible.
He'll tell you of your punishment, it's very very terrible.
He'll tell you of your punishment, it's very very very terrible.



Oh wait! he says, this filth is haram,
I must find a way to bring it down.
And Fissel from there went on a New York plane,
and whilst praying for paradise died in a fiery blaze.

Edited 10/22/2016 23:41:07
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 11:10:06


Belgian Gentleman
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I'm sorry to tell you that despite your huge effort and time you put in the making this fanfiction, the quality of it is still garbage.

Please kindly improve your content and we look forward to reply to you again.
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 11:27:10


Von Jewburg
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Well any suggestions Belgian on how to improve it?
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 11:59:21


The Lord
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Quality has an inverse correlation with quantity.
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 12:00:03


Belgian Gentleman
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first of all don't make fanfictions too egocentric. Make it happen that more people & topics are being involved in the story. Like in this story only 1 person was covered which made it extremely bad. Secondly make references. Thirdly make your story more dynamic, this was quite monotonous to read. Like I said before, cover more topics and don't constantly beat about the bush that is called islamism. Fourthly add puns. Seriously. You didn't even add a single pun to this story. I'm so dissapointed in you, my worshipper. Fifthly evade certain phrases that contain no humorous meaning at all. For example:
I am the very model of a modern little Islamist,
I defend sharia law and attempt to justify ISIS,
I know the caliphs and the sultans of which I'm related to,
And I'll chop your hands and head off if you think I disagree with you.

This is not also boring to read but also repetitive when you're continually describing Fissel's actions in your previous verses. Sixthly the Fissel meme is getting old. Many people have mocked him with radicalism, extremism and islamism already that your attempts are running out of date. Tell a joke once, it's laughable. Tell a joke twice, it's less laughable. Tell a joke a hundred times, it's not laughable for anyone.
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 12:20:53


Von Jewburg
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Well Belgian, thanks for your help.

I'll make sure to show new ones by you to screen out the stupid stuff.
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 14:02:04


Belgian Gentleman
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You're welcome. I'm glad I could help you out.
Warlight- A Tragedy; Dance of the Off-Topic Troll: 10/23/2016 20:13:14


Палач из Империй
Level 37
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Anyone else sing this as a Christmas toon?
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